Be kind and help tweak my poem?

I think has something to do with drug or alcohol addiction, but that's only from a skim read. I think the rhyming scheme you are using is a bit advanced.Try a cinquane scheme or maybe aaab aaab cccd cccd? Thats hhow I started I think for a beginner you are an excel :) I like this poem because I like dark poems and this paints depression into my heart :D Thanks for posting you awesome poem!